Well, who stuck it out to the end? Tragic and maddening, yet hopeful. We hope you’ve enjoyed the journey.
What’s next? A production company requested this screenplay two days ago, so thanks for helping me get it in the best shape possible.
The screenplay can get better still, with your help. A movie gets written three times, during the screenplay, during shooting and during editing. Since we’re still raising money to make this, there’s time to make the story better. Your thoughts and notes are valuable.
What works well?
What doesn’t work?
What’s too stereotypical?
What’s unrealistic?
What’s truthful, or dishonest?
What’s entertaining?
What emotions did you experience?
What made you angry about the ending?
Final pages 88-93 are below. Start from the beginning here.
Thanks for reading and supporting us!
Ian Max Eyre, Korstiaan Vandiver, & Cha Cha Sandoval-McMahon
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